Hi
Strengthen word choice at the word and sentence level by adding precise verbs. Avoid non-specific verbs and the overuse of is, are, was, were, I or we. Always look for verbs that are masked as nouns. Convert the noun back to a verb by using its root and rewrite the sentence.
Example:
John Smith will contact you at 11.30 p.m.
Revised:
John smith will send you an e-mail at 11.30 p.m.
Revised:
John Smith will visit you at 11.30 p.m.
Example:
We must consider this problem.
Revised:
We must resolve this problem.
Example:
The report is a summary of previous research on drinking.
Revised:
The report summarises research on drinking.
Example::
The copy editor made an improvement to the draft.
Revised
The copy editor improved the draft.
Example:
John is responsible for the distribution of the daily marketing report.
Revised:
John distributes the daily marketing report.
Example:
Improvement of the invoicing system will be performed by Jane Smith.
Revised:
Jane Smith will improve the invoicing system.
Example:
Candidate interviewing and employment is done by Human Resources.
Revised:
Human Resources interviews and employs all candidates.
Example:
All credit card approval is done by Jane Smith.
Revised:
Jane Smith approves credit cards.