Hi
Strengthen word choice at the word and sentence level by adding precise verbs. Avoid non-specific verbs and the overuse of is, are, was, were, I or we. Always look for verbs that are masked as nouns. Convert the noun back to a verb by using its root and rewrite the sentence.
Example
John Smith will contact you at 11.30 p.m.
Revised
John smith will send you an e-mail at 11.30 p.m.
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John Smith will visit you at 11.30 p.m.
Example
We must consider this problem.
Revised
We must resolve this problem.
Example
The report is a summary of previous research on drinking.
Revised
The report summarises research on drinking.
Example
The copy editor made an improvement to the draft.
Revised
The copy editor improved the draft.
Example
John is responsible for the distribution of the daily marketing report.
Revised
John distributes the daily marketing report.
Example
Improvement of the invoicing system will be performed by Jane Smith.
Revised
Jane Smith will improve the invoicing system.
Example
Candidate interviewing and employment is done by Human Resources.
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Human Resources interviews and employs all candidates.
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All credit card approval is done by Jane Smith.
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Jane Smith approves credit cards.
